This might be the concusion talking, but I think I love you. <3 Everytime I run off to search my soul I come back to find even more brilliance in the air! WELCOME!
Thanks!
Yeah, I'll edit some of the cigarette references when I get the chance. Yeah, I'll introduce a plotline. It's sort of like the Catcher In The Rye. For England.
Thanks again!
sorry, i 'm not sure if the message was sent :) so, re-posting:
here's my very personal, humble impressions and thoughts...
hope it helps!
dislikes:
too many references to
cigarettes!
too many fuck's don't do the
job. Lessen.
too much of ordinary life...
either you go through images, or get into serious details...IMHO!
likes:
word choices.
go even further, invent yr own, that's why english is so beautifully largely-inviting to!
plot:
something *big* has to happen soon, in the first pages.
obviously, definition of what is *big* is up to ya.
fine lines:
"I couldn
Hey, I don't want to sound needy, but could you read the two chapters I've uploaded of my novel 'Mixed State'? I need feedback... I'm not so confident about my skills as an author.
juniperlillie on Feb 24, 2010, 10:50 am
This might be the concusion talking, but I think I love you. <3 Everytime I run off to search my soul I come back to find even more brilliance in the air! WELCOME!
victorgodot on Feb 18, 2010, 5:26 pm
In My Humble Opinion...
Bejn Jonathon Xander on Feb 18, 2010, 5:12 pm
Oh, and what is IMHO?
victorgodot on Feb 17, 2010, 9:17 am
looking forward for it! i'm sure i'll like it...
Bejn Jonathon Xander on Feb 16, 2010, 4:26 pm
Took a radical change in Chapter Three. I think you'll like it.
Bejn Jonathon Xander on Feb 16, 2010, 3:37 pm
Thanks! Yeah, I'll edit some of the cigarette references when I get the chance. Yeah, I'll introduce a plotline. It's sort of like the Catcher In The Rye. For England. Thanks again!
victorgodot on Feb 16, 2010, 1:59 pm
sorry, i 'm not sure if the message was sent :) so, re-posting: here's my very personal, humble impressions and thoughts... hope it helps! dislikes: too many references to cigarettes! too many fuck's don't do the job. Lessen. too much of ordinary life... either you go through images, or get into serious details...IMHO! likes: word choices. go even further, invent yr own, that's why english is so beautifully largely-inviting to! plot: something *big* has to happen soon, in the first pages. obviously, definition of what is *big* is up to ya. fine lines: "I couldn
Bejn Jonathon Xander on Feb 16, 2010, 11:54 am
Thank you! That will mean a lot to me.
victorgodot on Feb 16, 2010, 11:33 am
Sure, i will. i'll let you know...
Bejn Jonathon Xander on Feb 16, 2010, 11:30 am
Hey, I don't want to sound needy, but could you read the two chapters I've uploaded of my novel 'Mixed State'? I need feedback... I'm not so confident about my skills as an author.